No Salvation

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Mr Smith rocked gently in his chair as a sudden gust blew through the dilapidated shop that was once Bob’s Lighting Emporium. He sat in darkness, a bible clutched in one bony hand, the foreclosure notice in the other.

Thousands of spidery eyes kept watch, sparkling jewel like in the moonlight. The blanket of cobwebs that festooned the unsold lamps on the dusty shelves fluttered silently to the tune of the creaky chair.

He’d been dead for twenty years and despite his efforts, it seemed that the people of Newtown had failed to see the light.

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15 Responses to No Salvation

  1. MrBinks says:

    “Thousands of spidery eyes kept watch”

    Loving that 🙂
    (and hating it, oh so very hating it)

  2. liz young says:

    Oo-er! Scary. I like the thousands of spidery eyes.

  3. Dear Kelly,

    Quite a picture you’ve painted. Shivers.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. Was that a chill wind that just blew by? (Could be; it’s quite cold here.) Just imagining that body rocking back and forth…and back and forth…and and all those spidery eyes.

    janet

  5. helenmidgley says:

    Loved it, especially those ‘Spidery eyes’ 🙂

  6. Great visuals and audio with the creaking rocking chair.

  7. K.Z. says:

    very eerie! loved the spidery eyes

  8. Sandra says:

    Great imagery, very sinister. Well done.

  9. Very good and very scary. I take it that’s his ghost sitting there. Either that or there was a plague that took all the people of Newtown too soon to bury bodies. It’s scary either way.

  10. This is my kind of story! The imagery was wonderful. Especially under the confines of 100 words.

  11. I love how you led into the fact that the story was actually about a dead guy. Fantastic!

  12. Nan Falkner says:

    Jeepers Creepers – good imagery and great story. Bony hands and spidery eyes rocking with the wind for 20 years. True terror and you’re a good story teller – THANKS! Nan

  13. Thank you all for your comments. It never ceases to amaze me how my jumbled outpourings attract such attention. The weekly challenge of finding 100 words arranged in the right order that reflect a hidden tale in each presented picture is a drug to me. I’m a user and a taker, long may Rochelle feed my habit.

  14. Linda Vernon says:

    Ah now!! I like this! I can hear the silence. What a great story you’ve spun!

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