Parting, shot.


Dirk took one last look behind him as he headed down the steep valley side, his family home of three generations silently returned his gaze. Autumn had reached the Cambrian hills late this year, the colours were only just getting interesting and he regretted having to go, especially in this way.

He wondered how an argument could have caused so much trouble, so much pain.

Leaving his family behind had been difficult. It would be days before anyone found them and Dirk was sorry for what they’d find, truly sorry.

Dirk threw the gun into the undergrowth and walked away.

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12 Responses to Parting, shot.

  1. That ended with a punch to the gut. A very sad story, so close to reality.

  2. troy P. says:

    Tightly written – I really liked this from start to unexpected finish.

  3. Isn’t it often the way that such tragedy can come out of the least important of incidents? A great write.

  4. kz says:

    a very sad, very dark realistic story. i enjoyed this. i liked the title too, Parting Shot. 🙂

  5. Nan Falkner says:

    This happens all the time – if a family gets into an argument over a Monopoly game. Thanks!

  6. I just had some sympathy for the poor guy… but at the end hmm… not so much

  7. Dear Kelly,

    For someone who claims to be “no writer” you write quite well. That must’ve been some argument. On the other hand, sadly, your story mirrors recent news stories. Well done.



  8. Thank you Rochelle, that’s a lovely compliment. I guess all the reading I do has had an impact.
    As I live in England, it’s only something we occasionally read in the news as having happened elsewhere. Those events are always sad, yet inevitable.


  9. I think it’s interesting that he’s sorry for what would be found, not that he did it. Sad how many people these days think that killing is the answer to disagreements or anger. Well written story.


  10. DCTdesigns says:

    Very well wriiten. You gave nothing away until the end and quite an impression it left behind.

  11. atrm61 says:

    Lovely crisp writing and sadly very close to reality!A great story:-)

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